Rhys Gerwin

Research Writing

Mid Term Self-Evaluation

My strength in this whole project seems to be my confidence with what I am writing about. Since I have personal experience with part of what I am researching, it comes very naturally to me to talk and write about it. I have also come up with a lot of speculation and conjecture, mainly in Dr. Bates' language, to explain to myself what is actually happening between me and the Bates Method for Natural Eyesight Improvement. What I think I need to work more on is gathering the crucial information for the main point that I want to make, which is that the Bates Method could potentially improve the reader's quality of living as it has done for so many others.

What I was originally attempting to address was not only a question of physiology, but also neurology, psychology, biology and many other areas of study that I will not understand on such short notice. I decided that I want my focus to be testimonial based research. People's personal account and explanation of the Bates Method, which may not be scientific, but it is still a reality to some people. I still want to use some scientific research to explain in low detail some of the theory behind the Bates Method but I want to make it clear that it's not meant to be a scientific research paper.

This brings up another point, since I have chosen an audience of the laity, I want to keep the language simple, understandable and still interesting. A lot of scientific writing can get boring and dry. I want to inspire people to take control of their visual habits, not tell them what Sturm's conoid is. I'm not quite sure how I am doing at that.